My University——Fudan-大学

      No classical work could pervade every cubic centimeter of air with such cultural fragrance but she.

     No judicious sage could merge various elements as a magnificent poem but she.
     No green tree could consist of vivid cells arousing every heart's anxiety for being young forever but she.
     She is my university  Fudan University.
     The first time I entered the campus as a freshman, I was deeply attracted by her cultural atmosphere and historical connotation. Fudan is a graceful lady who is accustomed to serenity but meanwhile each action of hers outpours her innermost tern perament. Apparently it is worth every effort to probe into her world for the sake of both physical and mental enrichment. Her humanistic spirit inspires me to care for everything around, even the most trivial one.
     On the other hand, catching up with the times, Fudan is modern and smart. You see, the many age-old buildings here are actually great libraries and labs. Scientific and technological developrnent is easily smelt in the air,because she never lags behind the world.
     Fabulously, such a historical and scientific school is far more than an operational mechanism.  Her everlasting youth and vigor beam through every corner of the campus and the young in school vivify every piece of concrete and wood here. What makes me happy and strong is that it perpetuates me with unfading energy. And it is definitely beneficial for me to be granted enthusi
     Another deep impression of my university is her creativity and profundity.  As is known to all, she has a wide range and comprehensive style.  No wonder I can enjoy the multi-ceolored life here. Every school year a diversity of competitions and aetivities are held and a large number of students take active part in them. I do appreciate such a style, and in my mind's eye, she resembles a tall tree silhouetting with all shapes of branches while stretching far into the blue sky.
     Undoubtedly there is a world of difference between university and high school.  University students are supposed to enjoy more freedom to develop themselves. However, Fudan seems more concerned about the efficient cooperation and teamwork among students as to prepare them for the competitive society. I believe upon graduation I will be equipped with abundant skills to face more unknown challenges.
     After all, in my opinion, university is for more cultivated character, richer knowledge and greater abilities. That's why I chose Fudan. She provides me with what I've dreamed of.
     Now all kinds of successes are in sight every day, and all I have to do is endeavor for a more beautiful future...

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    “日月光华，旦复旦兮。”她既承前启后，又多姿多彩；她有着悠久的历史传统，深厚的文化底蕴；她与时俱进，开拓创新；她古老的血脉中永远流淌着年轻的血液；她葱郁的校园里永远穿梭着活跃的身影……
    这就是作者笔下的复旦。她是一个梦想成真的世界，一方辛勤耕耘的土地；她是茁壮成长的乐园，更是撑起未来的支点。
    这篇散文以诗一般的语言，淋漓尽致地表现了作者对母校的深情厚意，对大学生活的热爱和对未来的憧憬。全文文笔流畅，玲珑精巧，婉转动人，给人一种“清风朗月”的美妙感受。
    不过，应该指出的是，文中有些比喻比较牵强。另外，文章的结构也还不够紧凑。
    (点评教师：时丽娜)