Let a Child Be a Child-大学

Let a Child Be a Child

     The traditional culture and current situation of China been taken into account, adjustment of laws to recognize the maturity of children at an early age thus seems to be hasty and impractical.
     It would be ideal if everyone in society were responsible for their own actions and words, if they were  in other words  in dependent individuals in law. However, children over 15 are a special group, especially in China.
     The adjustments of laws may require two assumptions,first, children over 15 are already mature enough to make good decisions for their own lives.  Second, they have the ability to pay for their misbehavior. Unfortunately, nowadays children in China fail in both aspects.
     Under the great care and love of the parents, the behavior of most children over 15 can never be described as premature. Half a century ago, children at the age of sixteen or seventeen were already doing heavy work in factories and earning money to help support the family, while children at the same age today are still pure flowers in the greenhouse which absorb the sunshine and wait for watering. They receive monthly allowance, leave their clothes washed by parents and wait for dinner to be ready. It is because of the lack of social contact and experience that children over 15 may seem unsophisticated, and even naive sometimes.The focus of children's lives moves between the family and school. Though children themselves may take it for granted that they have grown up and could act like adults, actually they are
     While children's immaturity hinders the adjustment of the law, the attitudes of parents and teachers reflect that it is impractical to do so. Since each family could only have one child at present, most couples pay meticulous attention to their children and always try to interfere with the decisions of the children.Furthermore, teachers also have great influence on children, as well as their behavior.  To some extent, it would be unfair to punish a child's misbehavior against law, neglecting the child'signorance and immaturity, and ignoring the adults' influence.For children over 15 still cannot be regarded as independent individuals in law.
     It is obvious that children over 15 in China are dependent on their parents and liable to take others' opinions. So it's not the right time to allow them to do things which go beyond their ability. Just let a child be a child.

简  评

    本文构思新颖。作者拥有律师般敏捷的思维，通过缜密推理细致分析，对是否赋予青少年自主权这一问题做出明确论断。文章的独到之处主要表现在以下三个方面：
    一．标题醒目，引言与结尾设计巧妙。标题“let a child be a child，，中两个“child意义不同，意味深长的点明文章中心。引言直奔主题，干净利落。结尾又总结全文，点明题目，呼应开头，令人印象深刻。
    二．推理论证严密有理。作者先阐明法律上的理想状态，再提出达到这一状态的两个前提条件，进而针对两个前提分别分析中国青少年现状，最后得出结论：目前尚不具备条件。论证以逻辑推理的方式层层推进，结构严整而又不落俗套，给文章平添几分雄辩的气势。
    三．文体合乎主题要求。对立法问题的讨论，需要客观、慎重、正式的文风。本文第一句的复杂长句和被动的结构都体现出庄重的风格。全文用词正式，句子结构相当紧凑。
    不足之处在于，本文倒数第二段中心不够明确，最后一句既是论点又是论据，分析较为矛盾，影响了议论的逻辑性。
    (点评教师：辛红叶)