Education of Adults-成人教育-大学

      In today's society, more and more adults return to the university, sit in the classroom, open the textbook again in order to further their education.  What they study involves a lot of subjects  not only English and computer used in all trades as tools,but also more professional ones such as MBA courses. Different from the  college  students  who may know little about  what they'll major in the college before they are engaged in it, the adults make their choices for some simple and definite reasons,which can be roughly classified into three groups, the requirement of the job market, the desire for higher salary and the need for entertainment and relaxation.

      In the era characterized of rapid development of technology,it is not so easy to find or to secure a job for the intense competition. As a result, adults feel what they studied in school is far from enough to deal with the work in hand. Thus, "to charge the battery" is listed into schedule by more and more people. For example, Mr. Wang, an accountant in a big company, suddenly realized it was too hard for him to understand technical terms coming from his young colleagues. And worst of all, they ap
peared in the program of their new business. So, firmly, he entered for a weekend course on accountancy for a further degree.
     But in some cases, people prefer reeducation just for money,which partly results from the professional job title system in China. Although virtually unrelated to people's own jobs, a few certificates are fervently pursued by some middle aged men and women just because they are the criteria for a higher title, which means some one hundred Yuan or so will be added to their salary. So it's the eagerness to grasp money rather than to study render them to return to the class.
     It is true that severe pressure of making a living stirs some people to pursue further education.  However,  this is not the case as far as another group of people are concerned. These people, with domestic and occupational stability, feel a lack of interest in their life. So, they turn to some courses such as music and arts and literature, which may be their childhood dream. Education of this type can relax their nerves, make them more graceful and their life more colorful.
      Mainly for the three reasons mentioned above, an increasingly large number of adults in modern society came back to classroom after they stepped out of the campus.  Whatever reasons lead to their reeducation, our society benefits a lot from the endeavor of these adults.  To name just a few, the workers' quality improves, and the income of education industry increascs... And more people are continuing to join the team of adult learners.  By the way,  if you  pay a little attention to your parents, you'll probably find a brand new College English Course which you have just finished is on his or her desk now.

简  评

    不知从何时起，下了班就去上课成为一种潮流，几乎席卷了所有上班族。“充电”成了最时髦的词汇。陈梦荫同学观察力相当敏锐，发现成年人接受继续教育有非常明确的目的，并将其分成三类一一分析。全文的结构富有章法：主体部分分类明确，层次分明，运用背景介绍、描写、分析、实例证明等方法将每一部分分析得十分清楚。各段之间运用了较为恰当的连接句，过渡自然。另外，本文的开头和结尾很有特色：以描写继续教育的景象开篇：大学里坐满了求学的成人；以提醒读者注意身边现象结尾：也许你的父母也在读你的《大学英语》呢!既首尾呼应，又巧妙点题，为全文增添了几分趣味。
    本文行文较为流畅，句子连贯性好，用词到位，语言错误少。但文中一些较长的从句若能略做删减，表达将更为简洁明快。
    (点评教师：辛红叶)